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Poweron
03-12-2016, 08:14 PM
Hey all, I am an aspiring writer and would love some feedback on my semi-long running series Spreading TF. Its full of a ton of sex, but if that doesnt daunt you I could use some critical eyes on my work: https://www.weasyl.com/submission/1223831/spreading-tf-redux-part-2-james

I have other parts but thats as far as I have been able to upload with the time I have onto weasyl. Let me know what you guys think!

Prostapheresys
08-29-2016, 09:12 AM
I found some grammar mistakes littered troughout the text, but otherwise it was a fine kinky/erotica reading ;)