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sayum
09-02-2015, 06:38 PM
So I did a character study on one of my friend's OCs, Collette. I like how it turned out but I would love some input. To get an idea of my intentions, I wanted the piece to be busy. Collette has a lot of people that talk over her and force their authority and opinion on her. Mainly her parents. In the midst of all of that she has her best friend who is in a similar and, perhaps, slightly worse situation. Then there is Collette's own voice in there, trying desperately to balance it all.

I would like critique regarding how the theme comes across as well as the piece in a composition sense. Colour critique is welcome as well.

I will post the direct file below but it is a png with opacity so if you want to see it in a darker background it can be viewed here: Not Your Fault - sayum (https://www.weasyl.com/submission/1089684/not-your-fault)
http://pre01.deviantart.net/d0a3/th/pre/i/2015/245/0/7/collette_character_study_by_hobocookie-d8y81rv.png

Antumbra
09-02-2015, 10:48 PM
I really enjoy the overall composition of the piece. The circle almost acts like a giant speech bubble in itself, adding to the crowded discussion. Color is also nice, the shades of blue give a calm, almost depressed mood.

The only thing I might suggest changing is the speech bubble from her is very hard to read. That might have been intentional given the idea, but the leaves seem to cover it a bit too much.