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Lavence
01-15-2015, 10:42 PM
I'd like some feed back on this (https://www.weasyl.com/submission/848337/it-s-always-a-nightmare-it-s-never-a-dream). My main problem is the shading on her head, like I'm not entirely sure if I did her jaw right. I'm also not very confident about the shading on her clothes.

Thanks in advance. c:

123mine123
01-24-2015, 04:38 AM
Females tends to have a more pointy chin..
She looks like a man dressed as a woman and it's kinda in a creepy way. ._.

Lavence
01-24-2015, 11:52 AM
That's not very helpful.

Antumbra
01-24-2015, 12:49 PM
I think the clothing is good. The hands and arms are also well done.

I do think your initial impression of the jaw being off is right. I think you made it too strong by having the heavy shadow under the jaw line and then no shading on the cheeks. It gives it a hard edge and makes it very pronounced. I think you did the perspective good on the face since it is looking slightly up, but the eyes seem too narrow.

Hope this helps!

Lavence
01-24-2015, 07:38 PM
I do think your initial impression of the jaw being off is right. I think you made it too strong by having the heavy shadow under the jaw line and then no shading on the cheeks. It gives it a hard edge and makes it very pronounced.
I wasn't sure if I should have given the cheeks some shading in case it would have looked off, but now I know. And I always have trouble with the jaw, so keeping this in mind should make it easier next time I draw faces in perspective.


the eyes seem too narrow
Well, she's supposed to be somewhat on the brink of tears. Maybe it just doesn't come off that way.

kynliod
01-28-2015, 07:29 PM
Just something to consider--and this coming from someone who has tried drawing this kind of angle and it is *hard*!--her facial features are angled upwards, but the length of the nose is more like what you would see if you were looking at someone head-on. As far as her eyes go, I'm not sure if this is what Antumbra meant when she said the eyes were too narrow, but the spacing between the eyes is too narrow. They should be about one eye-width apart.

I think this is the angle you were going for? Correct me if I am wrong: http://static2.bigstockphoto.com/thumbs/0/6/2/large2/26033186.jpg

In the photo, you can see the "length" of her nose at that angle is very short, because of the foreshortening/perspective. It's also worth noting that even though her head is tilted back, her cheekbones are still the widest area of her face, and there is still a lot of curve to the jawline. I think you'll find, also, that shortening the length of her head overall will go a long way in helping her look more realistic.

I wish I could be more helpful with the shading/highlighting questions, but it's hard to address those things without first addressing some of the perspective/proportion issues. I think it's very commendable that you are challenging yourself with such a difficult angle. My guess is you are learning a lot from this experience! Keep at it! =)

piņardilla
01-28-2015, 07:59 PM
I think this is the angle you were going for? Correct me if I am wrong: http://static2.bigstockphoto.com/thumbs/0/6/2/large2/26033186.jpg

In the photo, you can see the "length" of her nose at that angle is very short, because of the foreshortening/perspective. It's also worth noting that even though her head is tilted back, her cheekbones are still the widest area of her face, and there is still a lot of curve to the jawline. I think you'll find, also, that shortening the length of her head overall will go a long way in helping her look more realistic.

Shortening the head, and maybe lengthening the neck. I'm not sure the exact angle the OP was going for, but in the stock image linked here, distance from chin to base of the neck is the same as from chin to eye height.

Lavence
02-01-2015, 08:38 PM
As far as her eyes go, I'm not sure if this is what Antumbra meant when she said the eyes were too narrow, but the spacing between the eyes is too narrow. They should be about one eye-width apart.

I feel really dumb now lol.


I think this is the angle you were going for? Correct me if I am wrong: http://static2.bigstockphoto.com/thumbs/0/6/2/large2/26033186.jpg

In the photo, you can see the "length" of her nose at that angle is very short, because of the foreshortening/perspective. It's also worth noting that even though her head is tilted back, her cheekbones are still the widest area of her face, and there is still a lot of curve to the jawline. I think you'll find, also, that shortening the length of her head overall will go a long way in helping her look more realistic.

I wish I could be more helpful with the shading/highlighting questions, but it's hard to address those things without first addressing some of the perspective/proportion issues. I think it's very commendable that you are challenging yourself with such a difficult angle. My guess is you are learning a lot from this experience! Keep at it! =)

Yeah, that's the angle I was going for. This is really helpful, thanks a lot! c: