View Full Version : Looking for some critique on an erotic short story.

12-24-2014, 03:11 PM
Hello, Weasyl forums. A couple of days ago, I wrote up a short smutty piece of gay erotica for the holidays and I would like to use it as an opportunity to improve my writing abilities. The story can be found here (https://www.weasyl.com/submission/823750/under-the-mistletoe) and contains male/male sexual interactions, light humiliation themes, rimming, felching, and snowballing. If all of that sounds good and dandy, I hope you will give it a read. I enjoy writing furry fiction, but I need to know what I'm doing well and what I still need to work on in order to get to publication quality writing.

Grammatical and syntax editing is alright, but I'm much more interested in story construction, consistency of characterization, pacing, imagery, and general flow of the writing. If you have the time, please let me know what you think.