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StormWhiskers
04-17-2014, 12:06 AM
I'd really like any advice you've got on how to improve this pic because something looks 'off' about it to me.Both written advice or redlines are appreciated.

I'd especially love feedback on the dog, it's only the second time I've drawn a pitbull and I want to make sure that it looks like the right breed of dog. The boy is supposed to be in his late teens but I'm worried that I've made him look too old so let me know what you think of that too.

http://sta.sh/0xa5zlw2x3i

Rory
04-17-2014, 12:57 AM
I'm a beginner artist so I can't really red line anything for you, but the old age feeling coming from the boy is because it looks like there are some serious crow's feet around the eyes, and maybe a bit of wrinkles from around the mouth.

StormWhiskers
04-17-2014, 02:06 AM
Thank you! I'll smooth out the face more.

Zeitzbach
04-17-2014, 02:51 AM
the wrinkle fix will help a lot in making him look younger.

Maybe it's just me but the angle of the picture feels kind of odd. It's like, the leg is supposed to be pointing more toward the viewer based on the body but is forced all the way to the left to make it easier to draw.

StormWhiskers
04-17-2014, 03:26 AM
Thank you!

I've fixed up both and you're absolutely right about the leg.
http://sta.sh/025lqoy94i7p
Now that the back leg isn't as hidden I'm having a bit of trouble figuring out where it should point. I feel like it should be spread further but I want the dog to be
standing over it because its body is so long. What do you think?

Sammacha
04-17-2014, 10:27 PM
In my opinion to make him look more youthful I would make the nost and the mouth a bit smaller (more so the nose) but that is a matter of opinion.

For everything else I
see a few problem with the dog form knowledge of drawing them which isn't going to be 100% I dont draw a lot of pitbulls in particular but anyways, I draw a lot of animals. All is explained on the red line.

I've also changed a few things on the boy's position, to me I feel like its a little awkward right now, but again its totally up to you, this is just what I would do to it. Anyways I hope it helps or gives you an idea of some things you can do

If you dont understand something, feel free to ask me here on in PM, its jut something quick I threw together
http://i235.photobucket.com/albums/ee178/sammacha/red%20line/redlineforstormwhiskers_zpse1b01cae.jpg?t=13977878 43


to be honest I liked the wrinkles on the eyes, it means he is laughing really hard, I think making a few features of the face less figured would help make him look more youthful, in general (for me anyways) children have round faces, teens have ovalish faces and adults have much more square developed faces, elders have a mixture.

StormWhiskers
04-17-2014, 11:14 PM
Thank you so much! This is amazingly helpful!

Sammacha
04-18-2014, 12:08 AM
Thank you so much! This is amazingly helpful!

your welcome, its also quite hard to read on here...
http://i235.photobucket.com/albums/ee178/sammacha/red%20line/redlineforstormwhiskers_zpse1b01cae.jpg?t=13977878 43

(hurray the forum works again!)

StormWhiskers
04-18-2014, 12:35 AM
Here's my edited sketch
http://sta.sh/01kj494srhxp
Thank you so much for your advice, it really helped a lot!

Sammacha
04-18-2014, 01:14 AM
Here's my edited sketch
http://sta.sh/01kj494srhxp
Thank you so much for your advice, it really helped a lot!


That looks great, I think you did a good job making he boy look really happy and a bit younger then he did before. I feel like it looks more natural in this pose then he did before. I think you may want to scoot his butt forward a little bit though.
Also I really like the dog now, she seems more natural looking. I think it was just a few of the smaller details that where missing. It's sometimes hard to get a dogs face just right as well (trust me i have this issue too) but making the mouth go downward really seems to help make it less cartoony, if you know what I mean.

PS: don't forget the dogs tail! :P

StormWhiskers
04-19-2014, 07:54 PM
Alright! I'll scoot him forward and get started on the lineart, thanks again! :D

Sammacha
04-20-2014, 05:10 AM
NP, it will be nice to see the finished result and compare the two :)

StormWhiskers
04-26-2014, 04:47 AM
Here's the finished picture, thanks so much to everyone who helped! https://www.weasyl.com/submission/582329/pibble