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Dmitry
02-21-2014, 12:26 AM
Here's what i've got

Examples: (ALL NSFW)
Example 1 (https://www.weasyl.com/submission/484655/ps-1-5-redor)
Example 2 (https://www.weasyl.com/submission/484658/ps-5-5-redo)
Example 3 (https://www.weasyl.com/submission/401597/gaming-session-sketch)

Sammacha
02-21-2014, 02:00 PM
Awww, nobody commented yet?

Well honestly the middle one bothers me the most. I feel almost like the guy being held up is armless?
Like they just dispensary at the knee and other guys hand, well not even his shoulders are kind of you know... small/missing and then arms, hands, no here to be seen. not only that in such a position you would not be able to hide them anywhere without at least showing the shoulder going somewhere.

then the guy holding him up... why does he have 3 arms? O_o
Well I'm rather confused about the image, so perhaps some work on the anatomy in that part would really help.
Also the hand is in an awkward position...
you could relax the finger and shorten the top of his palm to make it look less stretched

I like the thrid picture, I feel its the better of the 3

Dmitry
02-21-2014, 04:06 PM
I do have a lot to learn still. The reference i used for this pose was really awkward as well...I should have just gone ahead and fixed it...Thank you for your help! I'll see what I can do!

Sammacha
02-21-2014, 04:27 PM
I do have a lot to learn still. The reference i used for this pose was really awkward as well...I should have just gone ahead and fixed it...Thank you for your help! I'll see what I can do!

Ah I see, I do sometimes run into a problem like that, if you want you can pm me the ref and maybe I can help you with a red line.
I would be willing to do it now but I'm a bit confused about what it is supposed to look like.
Of course no obligation :)
Good luck

Dmitry
02-21-2014, 06:14 PM
I think I'll just leave this one be. It's already a train wreck and I did it a while ago. My figure studies class is helping me fix a lot of those problems. I just need to practice.

Thank you for the offer though, I do appreciate it!

Sammacha
02-21-2014, 06:24 PM
No problem.
maybe you would prefere to have a sketchbook rather then a crit thread for this stuff?
https://forums.weasyl.com/vbulletin/forumdisplay.php?61-Sketchbook

Dmitry
02-21-2014, 10:55 PM
good idea! then I can just keep updating it as I go!

Sammacha
02-22-2014, 03:04 PM
you might want to lock this thread then. Have fun in the sketchbook area
:)